Hmm. Yeh I knw I have this very bad habit of explaining out things but I cnt seem 2 help that lol…newyz this poem is as the title says..essentially incomplete…youd see it wen u read it….i started it with a single stanza…but sumhow I cudnt expand it properly….newyz…here it goes…the bold stanza is the one which got me started……
Shes adorable
This lovely child
A little young devil
All emotions unfiled
And so she laughs
And so she smiles
Both friendly and naughty
And as crafty as a child
And yet look closer
Look into those eyes
Do you see that twinkle?
It’s there, it lies
Oh she knows she is loved
And yes she has friends
But there are times
When these frolics end
And she sits there
So alone, so unheard
And a silent pearl slips
Then a smile, not a word
For lingers that pasted smile
But that pain in her heart
Too lingers, it stays
It denies ever to part
Oh yes none know
How could they?
For that twinkle is easy
Along with that smile so gay
For then she laughs and she says
Lifes beautiful and lifes kind
And such gentle thoughts
Keep floating through her mind................
Change of plans now....i spoke to a friend of mine he was damn confused after reading this poem...asked me what it meant....so i first told him 2 send me his own interpretations.....which he did......and it was diffrent from my own.......thats wen i realised that id rather leave this poem as it is........reason...well its open ended...to me the incompleteness was that the poem hadnt got any base or any reason given for the depression of the girl...........but i realised that was the key to it.....the fact that i am giving the readers a chance to interpret it on thier own....thus the poem gets many dimentions to it
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I would ssay, this one ahs teh potential of living up to your earlier works, but definitely a lot of work is still required... As you said, its incomplete. Complete it, and then i shall give you my complete view on this. Till, apart from teh one in bold, it's the last stanza which draws some attention!!
Now, finish this one, wiil you??
well it does identify wid me a bit bt d last para
aint dat gal a lil too hopefull aachi........
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