Wednesday, July 04, 2007

SHIMMERING HORIZON (Dusk or Dawn)


A promise I had made to myself
A promise that now I broke
I thought I would have kept to it
But alas it wasn’t to be so
For yet again I let things go far
And yet again I trusted so much
But the past still haunts
Of the faults I had made
Of the choices I had picked
Of those memories of gore

And with that past I so thought
I had learnt my lesson
And moved on
Gods freedom I had then denied
For the choices I had made
I had made them wrong
To choose a friend
To journey beside me all along

Then yet again I stand today
With friends for eternity
But it took time
I trusted once more and it had paid
For God has been kind
And they’ve kept by me
And I know they’ll stay

But history they say
Repeats itself
And again that question arises
You came in too fast
For I couldn’t judge you
And allowed you so soon
That space I never gave

Oh yes you’ve been there
And yes you’ve trusted too
But what can I do
Of this fear that grips
Of that doubt and that hitch
Which so wrenches my heart
And shows me that moment
Of a time I’d be helpless
Of the day I wouldn’t find you
Holding my hand till eternity
And being forever there right beside me

20 comments:

Tshhar Mangal said...

Goshhh!!!!
u made me senti yaar...
good poem...
keep up the excellent work

moonstruck crackerjack said...

very nice...
especially da title....

reminds me of my frnd in school hu had a dog and her dog died in an accident..and wen her dad got her a new one she was afraid 2 let dis one outta sight lest even dis one mite get adventurous and try crossin da road widout human assistance 2 find out wat's in da huge trash can on da oder side...

ofcourse dis poem deals wid feelings on a higher and deeper level but still cmon dogs bhi to insaan hote hai....

Sam said...

Excellent!!
A suitable title to the poem too....
I loved teh way you put across teh insecurities that one might carry into tehir present day relationships from the past hurts... It's so true about the behaviour of the human mind.... and this insecurity which can cast dark clouds over the present... that's why they say past is a baggage you should outside your doorstep every morning... that's where they collect teh garbage from!! :)
Step over your past, for the present is beautiful!!

Aashi said...

@tush...hey thnx am glad u commntd again aftr so long :)

@moony..lol...yes buddy they r "humans" creatures with feelings
n glad u lykd the title i worked on tht :)

@namesake...yeh well thts there...but memories n experiances rnt garbage...it takes tym..my mantra has alwys 2 b positive..but then u learn soo much thru these phases......n then the negetivities r a part n parcel of tht...too let the wind in u need to allow the mosquitoes to enter also :P

Kandy..... said...

Awesome poem ash....

dunno how u come up with such complex stuff!!!!...its gr8...title's also vry appropriate...

Keep writing such superb stuff n surely u'll reach gr8 heights some day.... :-)

Jasleen said...

I'm moved by d level of intensity and depth ur poems have....u seem 2 be gettin better n better wid each poem of ur's.....well..can't comment much coz poetry's not my cup of tea......:D.....but still..i do appreciate d efforts nd creativity u've put in!!!!
Keep up d brillint work Aashi!!God bless u!!!.......:)

wacko said...

good to read. i agree wid u totally. but dat one thng wich bugs me d most is...wen we gonna actually start trusting anybody?? the fear of getin betrayed is gonna be there eternally no doubt..

so wht i feel is we sud eventually make oders feel how much we believe em or have faith in em..dat in turn can make thngs happen...ive experienced all f it as uve mentioned!

cheers!!

Aashi said...

@karandeep.......hey lil one!!!!.... :D its gr8 2 c ur commnt sweety... thnx a million times over 4 this :) n well if u keep flattring me lyk this...i dunno id fall big tym sum day...just b thr then too :)

@jas...hey sweety!!.. :) thnx a million glad 2 c u were finally able 2 commnt here :D.. yet again uv been a doll with ur commnt. :) i dunno how much to thnk u...its means a lot :)

@wacko...hello there..n well glad u njoyd the poem..and well abt trusting ppl i agree with u its high tym we do...

this is one poem iv taken outta my lkyf aftr yrs now.,..usually things were made up...but i guess its not just u n me buddy but a whole lotta ppl whov gone thru this...glad i cud convey it thou :)

vibhor said...

hey aashi!...hmmm poem on d insecurities of a d human mind!.....well so complex n yet so simple!!....wel its true ppl tend to distrustin in any relationship if dey hv sm bad memory preceding it....but wel dats d way of d world...anyway u know d poem title confuses me a little...wat dou mean by horizon...a new relationship?...

Aditya said...

whoa !! aashi waashi....u made me senti * sniff sniff*

awesom thot ;)...

Aashi said...

@vibhor...thnx buddy..well frankly the title means a horizon which is unclear..or shimmers....tht occurs wen its dusk or dawn ryt...??... thts exactly wat i cnt decide...is this new fren of myn..gonna b hurting me..or wud gimme the same trust i got frm my currnt speacial buddies...

the title talks of the fear i have in my heart...n doubt on my trust

@adi wadi...aww shux..thnx buddy..n to think u hated reading poems ;) :P

vibhor said...

ohk...ur dusk means dat is dis relationship goin to end in being hurt..dats dusk..or is it gonna be as special as d rest....dat is a new one which signifies d dawn..ryt?

Aashi said...

precisely vibhs...its the fear tht it signifies.....the uncertainity.... :)

Prateek Shah said...

Excellento!

as for The Fear that is being talked about, it's made the boldest of the people insecure.. it always looms..

Sam said...

hey aashi!! you jsut made ur blog mroe enchanting by just adding those pics!! good move... try out a few mroe things..a dtrust me your blogs is gonna get buzzing.. more than u can imagine!!

Aashi said...

@prateek...wellies glad u lykd it..n yeh well i tried to potray a comman fear of rejection.. thnx 4 this :)


thnkies namesake will do :)

Anand said...

i donot say i have a ryt to comment on such a beautiful work.. but just one small thing.. the word gore doesnt match in the context there:P

Aashi said...

lolzzz.... look who is here.. :D

hey mai!!

n u have all the ryts to do tht....since ur an awesum writer...so ne guidance frm u is great 4 me :)

as 4 the word gore..here its talkin abt the past...sumthing bad tht happnd before...sumthing unknown...

but if u wanna knw abt it

u can read choices..it'll kinda give u an idea :)

this is sorta continuation :)

Anand said...

[:p] lolz chaachi..
and well abt the word gore its litreal meaning as u know is bllod that has been shed.:P so that's y i was wondering as to how dat came into place in the context considered here.[:p] anyways i read the other poem too:P

Aashi said...

wellies i agree uv read the previous poem...n yeh gore means blood...but then if u have read the previous poem....thr was a bit of blood shed...membr the blows........


but more than the body...it was the heart tht bled which was gory...

:)


a bit subtle i guess...........

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