I am looking very nice you know
In my new dress.
As pretty as a rose,
Ma told me so.
She thought one on my hair
Would make me look like a princess.
I cant see her now you know.
STRANGE......
She is very pretty too actually,
My Ma.
Pa really loves her a lot.
He loves me too,
Says I make him smile.
But he has tears now.
He's looking stupid actually.
STRANGE...
He was to take me and Ma to the park
But where is Ma?
I have to see her rose still.
Some funny looking man is trying to talk to me.
Why doesnt he understand?
I wanted the rose ma was getting me.
She had one too.
A white rose.
I like white roses
But ma couldnt reach the other one you know.
She needed help to get it
So I did that, I helped her.
The rose was pretty.
I have my white rose with me finally now.
But pa isnt happy.
STRANGE...
In my new dress.
As pretty as a rose,
Ma told me so.
She thought one on my hair
Would make me look like a princess.
I cant see her now you know.
STRANGE......
She is very pretty too actually,
My Ma.
Pa really loves her a lot.
He loves me too,
Says I make him smile.
But he has tears now.
He's looking stupid actually.
STRANGE...
He was to take me and Ma to the park
But where is Ma?
I have to see her rose still.
Some funny looking man is trying to talk to me.
Why doesnt he understand?
I wanted the rose ma was getting me.
She had one too.
A white rose.
I like white roses
But ma couldnt reach the other one you know.
She needed help to get it
So I did that, I helped her.
The rose was pretty.
I have my white rose with me finally now.
But pa isnt happy.
STRANGE...
13 comments:
well... it beautiful but a bit complex too........ its teh end which leaves the reader with question mark.... where does the white rose feature??
Awesome initial emotional movements, but i felt something was missing especially the end could have been more expressive. The message was clear but at the end u missed out on depth it required.
i always liked da november rain video in wich da red roses on da casket in da end get washed in rain and fade 2 white....
oh was i supposed 2 comment on da poem....
sorry....
superb once again.... it has perfection... i can understand the feeling insyd the poem.. i wonder how u potray such emotions so wonderfully ....
@mai... :)
hey....luvd it a lot.I found it so expressive :)
u really gud...keep them coming.
hey thnx 4 dropping by girl... :)
love the flow.
wow.
elegant write.
this work of art is well written....
you are astounding as ever :)
Through the eyes of a child, a girl actually. So emotional yet sincere. Very powerful!
I feel like I get it...and if I do...it makes me sad...and that is the point of poetry to convey emotion isnt it?...lovely writing Aashi!
Sad, and with a question at the end that maybe the reader doesn't want to think about the answer. Sad, and lovely.
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